arspoetica

The main problem I had with this poem was the rhyming. I feel that if you're going to have a rhyme scheme, you should follow through with it until the ...

That was creepy. Nevertheless I thoroughly enjoyed it! I really like the idea you have going. I couldn't really find any grammatical errors, but they may still be lurking there. ...

I feel that each stanza definetly stands out on it's own, and i had a hard time connecting the overall meaning. I did notice religious motifs in most of them, ...

The structure of this piece was amazing!!!!! I love the way you kept building up the tention. At first i thought it was just going to be a depressing love ...

I think you have definetly set yourself up pretty nicely for a novel here. I have never heard of a book about all women warriors, and being unique is a ...

Amazing use of imagery, this is a heck of a poem. I love the twist, and i'm glad you said the clouds were sad. In poetry you tend to see ...

Well first of, you need to work on your grammer. There are a lot of mistakes in there.... what do you do when it dont doesn't feel the same? But ...

Donny kicked up dust as he rounded the corner of the barn. He stopped at the entrance, and heard the hooves of his pursuers' horses. His adrenaline was rushing through ...

Amazing job with this piece! About halfway through i forgot it was a fiction piece. Amazing use of vocabulary and character development as well! I'd give constructive critisizm but i ...

The structure of this poem was my favorite part by far. With every three lines you added a new piece of summer to the puzzle, everything seemed to flow pretty ...

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You have a very powerful piece there, it seems to ooze emotion. You have a lot of imagery (Which is very good.) and this piece definitely inspires emotion, which is ...

Definitely a unique piece. I thoroughly enjoyed it, especially when you broke the wall between the reader and the piece, i rarely see that done well. Well done!

This made me smile. Anyone who can take a gruesome, depressing topic and make me laugh throughout most of the story did an amazing job. When Wayne went into the ...

One line in particular to me stood out as needing a little rephrasing. so perfectly was it all set up. Just try rearranging the words to get a smoother flow, ...