arspoetica

I like how you're trying something new by structuring your poem, and i only have a couple things to say about changes. But I've turned around once again. Your memories ...

This poem had amazingly strong imagery, and your diction was beautiful. The only thing i think is a mistake is churn engines, breathe with lungs of gasoline, I think you ...

Great job with this poem! I only noticed one mistake. You think you can do whatever you want it, right?" I don't think there should be an it after want ...

I went into this piece determined to give helpful tips but i can't think of anything! I didn't see any grammatical mistakes, or any lines that were confusing or choppy. ...

Amazing job with this poem! I didn't find anything i would change in this poem so well done! My favorite part wasn't actually a line, but the fact that you ...

I really like the flow of the poem but there are a couple things i would consider. I had never before. I would make it into "I never had before." ...

So first off there are a lot of typos that should be fixed. uterly powerful. Utterly needs a second t. arer mized with lust I'm sure you know what is ...

I reall like this poem. One thing you should think about is punctuation. You have it set up as one long, run on sentence. This is perfectly alright, and it ...

This piece is just as good as the first! The only mistake i saw was You honestly think you can overthrow a Queen whose birthright was the throne of Italy! ...

First off, wonderful title. Second, wonderful story. Your diction was wonderful, and the fact that you seem to know your topic very well is great, because it's hard to right ...

The flow of this poem is perfect, and the fact that every fourth line in each stanza is the same, and rhymes with the first line, it just sounds satisfying. ...

Sadistic demons are always good topics for writing! I really liked this piece and i only have two corrections “Really!” Gerard was surprised by the amount of excitement in Johnny’s ...

I live right next to a fence that has one of those shrines, and reading this I was able to picture it perfectly. Your descriptions were spot on and you ...

Alright, this chapter officially hooked me. Your writing style is perfect for this genre, and your diction is perfect for the era. Also, you did an amazing job seperating the ...

You did an amazing job with establishing the scenery right away. That is really important in a novel, as well as establishing characters, which you seemed to do well, especially ...