arspoetica

i agree, short poetry is very difficult to write, and you did a nice job here. I disagree, however, with the need for punctuation. I only got to read it ...

I think you have a very strong idea for a poem here, but I feel that your execution needs a little bit of work. I only noticed one major grammatical ...

The only mistake i noticed that hasn't been mentioned already was in the beginning, Fingers assaulted by the cold, he turned the lock hearing the mechanical click. It should probably ...

arsp;oldetkicas ah man i thought i was doing well

Simultaneous rhythmic steps, the sound of violins, singing through the rooms. The sweet smell of her breath, and her soft touch on my shoulder as we dance across the hardwood ...

Well since you've made changes, i guess it's time for a re-review. He bellows Leers Down my ears; "Can you hear me through your tears?" I really like this stanza, ...

This one touched me personally, seeing as i am the laziest person i have ever met. You did a really nice job at making something thats so normal to most ...

That was a very eery, but amazing poem at the same time! I only have one possible recommendation for something to change. Say 'sleep tight,' And don't be afraid. Don't ...

Leafs trickle all around her, Twirling down their spiral paths. She turns the page of her book, Breathing the fresh nature air. The only sound is the singing of birds, ...

I really like the imagery you use in this poem. It was all very strong and really held the poem together. There is only one thing I would recommend thinking ...

I love this poem! Some parts lacked some imagery, but others had strong imagery. There is only a couple things i would change. I called your name a million times, ...

Amazing if I must say so myself! (And i must) I wasn't sure what to make of the poem until the very end, and it added a sort of strange ...

First off, title works just fine. Second, you've written a very lovely poem here. Know for some criticism! One thing i noticed is that at the end of every line, ...

I hate doing this, but i have to disagree with Confetti. I feel the two closing lines flowed fine, and personally I really like those lines. Never have truer words ...

Well done for doing this quickly. First off, however, the I think the title should change to "The Sirens play the Sailors a Tune." Just lose the S on the ...