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Thanks for the review. I edited it a little, but I'm going to finish editing in a while. I didn't really like the title (still don't) so I changed it. ...

It looks interesting. There were a few spelling errors, but other than that it looks fine. You could change some wording up to make it a little more fluent and ...

I still use the word mama. It just depends on how you want to portray your character. If you're looking for a grown up, mature for her age, young woman; ...

This is the first time I've posted one of my works on here. Feel free to criticize it as much as you want. I don't get insulted. Advice on fluency ...

Looks good. I really liked your comment on how antisocials and nutcases don't mix. There were a few errors in your punctuation, but I didn't really find anything else. I ...