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It could be longer, but it's pretty good. There's a couple of knit-picks, but no major issues. I do wish that there was a little more plot in this section, ...

It looks good. I love all of your description. :D I can picture what's happening. Great job, I see no major issues. There's just a few knit-picks. Cigarette smoke wafts ...

Welcome to YWS. I hope you enjoy it here. :) The day of reviewing is coming up in a couple of hours, and you can get more points than normal. ...

Here's my next chapter. I changed the age of Timmy to six. I might end up completely redoing the first chapter, but I'm not sure yet. Chapter 2 As my ...

It confused me a bit to begin with, but I liked it. It was very creative. :D A couple of your rhymes might have been a litle forced, but you ...

I would...If no one would minds that I've never done a storybook before. It sounds fun. :D

Over all, this was pretty good. You could brush up the flow a bit and fix a couple errors, but good job. I was slightly confused the first time I ...

Thanks everyone. I have written the next part, but I need to brush it up a bit before I post it here. It's all on paper. I just have to ...

It looks good, and I could only find a couple small errors. Jocosa had grown up to be a rough-looking girl with a protrudant not sure if this is a ...

This is a story I've been writing on. (I hope to actually finish this one) It's actually been really fun writing this, but I'm completely incapable of reviewing my own ...

I love your colors. They're beautiful. You might not want to show so much at the top (like someone before me said), but they are really spectacular photos. :D

I loved it. You did great with the vivid descriptions.Way to go! :D

I love your theme. It's very interesting. Lilymoore got both of my nitpicks. Like I saaid I love your theme. :D

This was an interesting beginning of a story. :D I have a couple of nit picks I'd like to point out. Also, welcome to YWS...allthough I'm newer than you. Jason ...

I'd like to know what you think about this poem. I'm not sure it flows too well, but it's hard to judge my own work. Criticism is appreciated. :D When ...