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Great job. I love the drawings. They're far better than I could do. Keep going. It's great. :D Your storyline is getting intresting.

It's a cute, fun poem to read. It's reletively simple, yet still entertaining. Most of the things that could/should be changed have been mentioned allready, but I do have to ...

WOW. That was great. Some of the rhymes might have seemed forced, but it was still awesome. I haven't been here that long, but suicide poems seem to be a ...

Good job. I enjoyed it, and it was nearly entirely free of small knit picks. You went over it pretty well before posting it here I'd guess. :D I mean, ...

I like you're writing style, and I'm okay with the story. I don't agree with the view of drugs ot all, but the writing itself was pretty good. I'm just ...

Good job. I liked the idea, and I liked the way you comunicated it. There's not really anything I can say that others haven't commented on. It did seem rushed, ...

Ok, I really liked this idea. You did pretty good, but some of the rhymes were...forced. I have to agree with springs616. Your descriptions were good, and you did well. ...

It looks pretty good. I wish I could hear the tune, but it does seem like there's a rythym to it. You use alot of good description that makes it ...

I cant really say anything that BenFranks didn't allready say. I agree that you should've used shorter sentences. One of yours managed to take up four lines. In places like, ...

Welcome to yws! You joined just in time for review day. :D

It's good, very good. It makes me want to read more. Are you planning on posting another part? You're a talented writer. Good job. :D

I've been enjoying your book so far. It's pretty good. I'll definately continue reading. The one thing I've really noticed is that you've switched a few times between past and ...

Chapter 1: 2 thousand years later. After a long 2thousand years, soon to be called the Dark Ages, there was a Nymph girl, of the name Deborah. She was a ...

It's an interesting storyline, and sets the plot pretty well. There are a couple of knit-picks I have, but you didn't bad at all. Jerahbeth was once known as one ...

I love it. It's funny, whitty, aand fun overall. There is only one thing I'd look at. I'm near the place where that guy- *gulps* Right there I wasn't sure ...