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First off, it sounds interesting. In this review I’m not trying to sound absolutly negative. I want to give you some criticism that could actually help your work. The first ...

Ok, you successfully captured my attention. Good job. I just have a couple of little nitpicks (one of them already mentioned), but otherwise it was great. You kind of lost ...

A beam of energy hit her back and the tangible world faded from sight. Submerged in darkness, Caia roamed her mind. She wouldn't regain control of her body until it ...

I'm trying to review a book of one of my friends, but there's one thing that's driving me crazy in her writing. I don't normally notice adverbs when reading, but ...

We all know how rare it is to actually find a finished novel in storybooks. This is a place to give an applause to those who actually followed through from ...

Erika ~ Poseidon Where was the rest of her cabin? From what she could tell, there was still one person missing. She gritted her teeth and looked across the rows ...

Erika ~ Poseidon "God morning Ani. What are you rushing for?" Erica said with a smile as she caught her coming out of their cabin. Despite the fact that she ...

Sage Plains ~ Satyr What would be for breakfast? Sage thought to himself. He closed his eyes and tried to imagine the best meal ever. Ice-cream and cookies came to ...

Name: Sage Plains Age: He's twelve, but he acts like a six year old. Appearance: He's your average satyr, but he's as small as your average human six year old, ...

Name: Erika Hudson Age: 14 1/2 Parents: Poseidon and Shelly Hudson Appearance: She's of almost average height, but she's slightly on the short side. Her eyes are blue, and had ...

Great job. I can't really find anything to point out. You have great comparisons, and your rhymes don't seem very forced. You did well. :D

That was great. I'm afraid that I'm saying what has been said before, but the rhymes were confusing. Other than that, you were great. I love the title, and the ...

Very good. THere was only one spelling error that I could find. . I run back on defense and follow the ball. It should be spelled defence. Overall you did ...

Like people before me have said, it's not bad for something that was rushed. It's not even bad for something that wasn't rushed. I can deffinately imagine how the tune ...

I liked it. Boolovesyou got pretty much everything, but I want to put some emphasis on one of his comments. When I look to my right I see a cloud, ...