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Please review. I need the feedback!!

Last time I left off the main character had found love with a boy named Tomas. Her father left her when she was young and her mother was crazy. Enjoy! ...

This is a very good story. Like both the reviwers said before it is confusing in the beining. Keep what you have, but add on to it say what happened. ...

Thank you.this is very helpful I am not going to make another edited verson I will just post the second chapter. Again thank you!

Love sucks. It’s not real and it sucks. Learn this now. I did. As bad as we want it love isn't all its cracked up to be. It is what ...

This is okay. It definatly has some potential. It does need some work though. Sorry to say, but i wasn't hooked. I didn't get the spark of good writting when ...

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Love sucks. It’s not real and it sucks. Learn this now. I did. As bad as we want it love isn't all its cracked up to be. It is what ...

This is a good piece. I like it and can defitaly realate to it. There are a few typos, nothing to big. I cant wait to see more.

Sounds that made her skin pimple with goosebumps and her scalp crawl as if phantom fingers stroked her hair. This is okay. I personaly don't like the fact her skin ...

This is good. I later found out that both of them took poison and were seen laying on the bed, holding each other's hands. Now isn't that a sweet ending? ...

This is scary. There was no major gramatical errors that i could see. You are very descriptive about your characters and setting. The only thing you should fix is telling ...

It was scary as hell the day that America got bombed. I can't remember the date but the day is a vivid image in my head. I was home alone. ...

This is pretty good It is some what depressing. I think you tried to lighten up the mood of it with jokes but the way I see it, it isn't ...

I think that this poem is great. You show the reality and the fact that it is hard to be the 'beatiful girl'. The lesson I took from this poem ...