antimelrose

I agree with Kamas: you need a bit more of an idea to drive the poem. In short, what is its point? You have a lot of potential here, with ...

Hello again! I didn't mean to be vague, and I'm sorry for the confusion. Thank you for clarifying the origin of 'deceased mind'. Now I know that you were writing ...

Okay. The poem was fairly decent, at least in terms of vocabulary choice and rhyme scheme/meter. However, the theme "disease of the self", though explored in interesting, intricate phrases, never ...

Oops, sorry about the confusion: I didn't mean for that to be the main theme! Unfortunately, I don't have the time right now, but I'm thinking I may "spirit away" ...

Aww, it was so sweet! This shall be a brief review (homework, argh!), but the two nice lines, "worlds and websites" (euphonious, even better) and "black text and electronic light" ...

Although Tuvalu seems interesting. I think we're all vouching for San Marino, however, because it's so close to Italia. Who can live in the Vatican City? Is it only clergymen? ...

I really enjoyed reading this. The cold, crisp descriptions were quite nice; I also found it interesting that you ended the poem with a final, brief line about the city, ...

Well, your little explanation blurb at the beginning kind of gave it away, but the suspense was still strong. "Hope you like it!" is awkward when the poem is about ...

Thank you for the feedback, everyone! I hope I sheared enough of the excess. Let me know if any other tweaking is required. Oh, and by the way, (Galerius, to ...

Hello Evi! Could you please review my poem, "Bird of Recess"? It's in the Other Poetry section. Thank you! –antimelrose

Hello, could you review my poem, "Bird of Recess"? It's in the Other Poetry section. Thanks. –antimelrose

Oh, I guessed right about the sun "over the ocean"! I think Monet did a picture that brings this exact image to mind. As for the final line, a word ...

Wow. That was one huge thought! Probably the two most charming thoughts/phrases/words happened to be "my last one almost lasted a week" and "Rocky". Not overly imaginitive, but quirky and ...

Hello! I was wondering if you could please review my poem "Bird of Recess". It's in the Other Poetry category. –antimelrose

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