antimelrose

Thank you Venturepants! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Hello Evi! Could you please review my poem? It's in Dramatic Poetry. Thanks! –antimelrose

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First off, I want to thank you for using unusual vocabulary. It's really pushing me to expand my own! Now, this one (#14) initially came off as cryptic, but I ...

Your descriptions are phenomenal: both exhilarating and unexpected. They are so convoluted, however, that sometimes I felt lost reading them. There was a gorgeous intensity, to be sure, but it ...

Your commas are overabundant, and it disrupts the flow of the poem. Take out just about all of them, and you should be good to go. For a comma separates ...

Don't assume that every woman impregnated via sexual assault wants to have an abortion. I can't find it right now, but a few years ago I read in a magazine ...

Hello sealegs! Once again you're messing around with parenthesis in the title, and this time I think I might get it! Buying or burying, that is the question; what are ...

Well, the libertarian in me wants to say, let the people decide! Keep government out of it! But I'm not overly libertarian. I have seen pictures of human babies at ...

I just read the Invisible Man in my American Lit. class! I think it is one of the best written books I have ever come across. So that's cool to ...

Your imagery is effective and surprising, but why write a poem about not wanting to? You have such excellent potential for this poem, but it ends up being a waste ...

Well, Hannah pretty much nailed all the stuff I'd tweak with it, but in the end this remains an excellent, strong work. You don't stray from the theme and your ...

Awwwwwwww. How sweet. The grammar was horrible, but the idea of a YWS convention sounds great. The only problem is that it's on the wrong coast for me... I don't ...

I feel that with each stanza the poem got stronger, for it felt rather weak in the beginning. Once I realized that you weren't trying to rhyme, the whole thing ...

Wow, these are spectacular. I especially like the first one, though the others are really nice as well. The middle is really effective with the color contrast, but maybe because ...