antimelrose

When I saw the title I thought immediately of Marianne Moore's two poems on the very same thing. However, hers discusses the actual writing, while yours concerns the reading of ...

I had to look up Sakura, but once I found out it added a nice dimension to the haiku. I know both "sakura" and "tsunami" are connected because they are ...

Hey Dante! Did you name yourself after the epic poet? I think it's a great name. –antimelrose

I really liked this, and I have little to nitpick. You had an excellent theme and, for the most part, wrote a decent poem to frame it. "Like your arm ...

I think it's possible to question a belief, yet still come away fully accepting it. Often the things most worth believing in have to be rigorously debated first. I am ...

I'm afraid that you haven't give us, the audience, a lot to work with. And if the author doesn't even understand what he or she wrote, how can the readers? ...

Well, it has a lot of potential, but your descriptions are so smothered by cliches that they hurt the poem. "Mist danced" (and mist moves rather slowly, so I don't ...

Erm... okay, I sincerely hope you don't hate me for this, but I liked the original version better. Especially since I am unfamiliar with music vocabulary, it was harder to ...

I don't have a lot of time right now, so I shall be brief, but "field, highway, and horizon" is brimming with fantastic potential. In my opinion, which at times ...

Ciao! I'm finally here! (And this is for "a most inconvenient bedfellow". Nice title). I'm sorry if I misinterpret something, as I often tend to end up befuddled by the ...

Um... I'm afraid I'm going to be a bit harsh. The first thing I noticed was how loaded this was with cliches. It felt so shallow, so unrealistic.... and I ...

I think you should scrap this, mainly because it is simply saturated with cliches. Not to mention that it came across as shallow; nothing stirred my emotions when I read ...

Thank you Navita and Evi! I see (*cringes*) that there are several gray areas to be rehabilitated. Confusion was not my intent! :D I'll give it a rest, probably a ...

Navita: Whew. That was some review! But I'm so glad that someone took the time to actually read it. I understand that I had some rather ambiguous language in there, ...

Hello Venturepants! I would say that the poem initially starts off a little weak, but strengthens considerably by the end. I think that there were a few cliches in there–describing ...