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Hmmm. Food for thought, indeed. I already have thoughts about giving it open–heart surgery... I guess I should mention that I did fail on purpose to mention she was a ...

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This was a mixed bag. You had some fantastic moments followed by very awkward cliches. It felt like a see–saw, really. First stanza captures precisely what I mean. I would ...

"Eloquence" threw me off for a couple stanzas, but I think I got the gist of it– your alternative ending to the Civil War. There are some thoroughly off–kilter moments, ...

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Is it just me or did the search box disappear?

Okay, okay, I'll have at it again. Similarity –mother figures show up in, whether implied or direct, in every poem/section. –relationships, especially nurturing the earth as if it is the ...

Aw Navita, I wanted you to PM me when you posted something! Anyhow, Evi and kidashka covered their nitpicks.... I loved the first one (let me repeat: absolutely gorgeous is ...

For the most part your meter was okay (and trust me, many people botch it), so kudos for that. I won't nitpick everything, but there's a couple trouble places that ...

Thank you Evi for stopping by. I really appreciate the comments. I'll go send this through the laboratory again. I'm not sure how to make this more explicit, but Charlotte ...

Hey Navita, thanks for stopping by. It's a petty plot, really– the girl steals a ribbon as an act on revenge on the store that sells writing supplies, because she's ...

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Hello! I know I'm out of my league on this one, but I'll try my best: All four photos were nice, but the last one was a real stand–out and ...

Well, this is out of my range of expertise, but I liked the drawing anyway. I think it was well done, when one compares it to the original cover. I'm ...

Thanks for the reviews. I fixed the first one's line (thank you Rune for pointing that out). As for the second one, I know the first three are liquids and ...