antigone

Wow. This is so amazingly apt and... good. I love the stark image and the deadpan tone of this. to drop bombs on breakfast tables I'd change 'to drop' to ...

I really liked the middle stanza, where the whole nurture/nature cliche became un-cliched and cool. The last two lines were a little... abrupt? or something. Or maybe I'm just not ...

poof

I liked this too. It's kind of... unpolished, and I mean that in the best possible way. It doesn't need to be amazingly poetical because it's so heartfelt and true. ...

I like to shake them up and give them to people. Do you enjoy going to the dentist?

animosity

Ditto what bubblewrapped said about loving it while not fully understanding it. The last stanza was my favorite, although I'd write out 'could have' instead of 'could've'. Very nice work.

^ Is probably not as his siggy would indicate

Beautiful. I love the prose-ish quality of this, it flows so well and is very nice to read. And all your wonderful images... (not that it's always so beautiful) I'd ...

I like this. Majestic, like writingluver said. Although I think the 'I remember's add a lot to the rhythm, and keep it from getting too sing-songy. When my heart breaks ...

This is kind of amazingly well written. Here's a few tiny nitpicks I got just reading through it: And the jagged scrawling coating the brick wall, insignias and tags galore. ...

So you asked for a great big critique and I'll try but this is seriously good. It is just you, us, and the low, saturated clouds in all directions. There ...

9/10 randomly cute

8/10 Cute. I wonder what it is?

^ ^ plays piano?