antigone

I like it, personally I think the flow is fine. My only suggestion might be to change Drilled and invaded at the hands of hands unfit for invading; ones better ...

Actually, I liked this. For some reason I liked it even better before I knew what it was about. Weird. But then again, it does give driving an interesting twist. ...

Wow, I loved it. I don't think you need to expand it. The language is perfect, it seems urgent but also precise and almost dreamy. Crystaline. I'm not making much ...

Yeah, it is really good. The only thing that confused me was in the second stanza the first line says "dreams of flying" and then the last line "has now, ...

This is good. Maybe in the beginning there was a tiny bit too much GREY, but then again that is sort of the point. So whatever. The only other thing ...

I think it's funny. But then again I've never read the Bible, so I might not know what I'm talking about. Good job though. :)

I like the repetition. I don't think you should cut anything. And I agree with Hunter about the lowercase/capitals thing.

I loved it. Very intersting and well done. The only thing that bugs me is the bolded lines. It seems kind of like in a comic strip where some words ...

I like it. The rhythm is a little weird but it was interesting. And I like the last line.

I especially liked the first line. I love how it started and it sounded like it was not the begining of something. Er, I'm not explaining it very well, but ...

Um. It is rather terrible. :) But I love pee dot ess dot. It made me laugh.

I think it's cool but it's not really a poem. Maybe a chorus or a beginning or something. At this point it's not really clear what it's about but it ...

Yeah, I love it. Especially the third stanza. I agree with most things Niteowl said, except I think the stains in the satin are showing in your face. Is fine. ...

I love this too! I like the bolded lines, I think they make it different. My favorite is the middle stanza. (Stanza? whatever. The part between "The clock still ticks." ...

Cool. I don't really see the point of it, but who says poems need a point? I like it, especially the last stanza and "She plays guitar horribly, And dances ...