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Thanks so much for the reviews :). I totally got where MrSherrington was coming from about having more puntuation to make it easier to read when I read it back ...

I like the repetition a lot and the ending was beautiful and kind of sad because it's an innocent boy trying to tidy up the mess left behind by other ...

I really love how you used structure to emphasize what the poem was saying about the things missing in life that cause people to want to hurt themselves. I thought ...

We're on the same boat, him and me, I watch the faraway land draw closer, He strains to watch what once was across the vast sea, Neither of us see ...