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How did I not know you could draw this well? Hidden talent much... Will be having words tomorrow!

I loved this so much! That line "He could also throw me" was really unexpected and so powerful. The repetition of "If I closed my eyes it wouldn't hurt as ...

The rhymes felt really forced, maybe you could try rhyming every other line instead of all the way through? Nice message though, loving the use of repetition and the rhetorical ...

I know this story is from a while ago but it totally reminded me of my little sister! Lol, really great and kind of nostalgic... Loved it :)

Thanks for the reviews guys :) I was worried people wouldn't really get the metaphor so I'm relieved Molly got that it was about mental stability. I'm definitely going to ...

I thought my house was made of bricks, But instead it's made of glass, It only took one stone to teach me, That nothing good will last. A tiny crack ...

Wow. I really felt like I knew the soldier. It was like he was only fighting because that was the expectation, because he wanted to be a hero and when ...

I really enjoyed the first stanza and I thought you made a really interesting point. I wasn't as keen on the second stanza though because I thought the rythm of ...

This is lovely, it's so simple but I wouldn't change a thing. It's got an almost innocent feel to it, like it's from a childs perspective. Really great job :)

It's is really well written but, like the other reviewers, I didn't really connect with it until the final stanza. You definitely shouldn't scrap it though, maybe just add some ...

Wow, I loved this so much... really interesting ideas. Usually I like poetry that rhymes but this didn't feel like it was missing that at all. I loved the repetition ...

Reading this made me smile :) "For only the stars dare, To shine in the dark" I thought those two lines were stunning. I disagreed with the above comment because ...

Even when all the worlds decayed, and in neat rows the dead are laid, and among the rows lay You an I, nobody left to mourn or cry. Even when ...

This is really thought provoking... I love the rythm to it because it's like you can't stop reading, in the same way that the traffic can't stop in the poem. ...

I loved it. Particularly the fact that there wasn't a strict rhyming scheme, just where it seemed natural. It made the narrator seem more real and easier to relate to. ...