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Wow. I usually despise vampire literature, but this was so good! An extremely strong beginning: you know exactly how to bring a reader into the story. I was just wondering ...

Ooh, I like. Your atmosphere is absolutely wonderful, and you definitely give a sense of the mystery that is to come. However, I can't really say a lot about this ...

Esme, have points! Thank you so much for the line by line, the awkward phrasings are exactly what i need to know about. Maris was indeed married to Lewis, though ...

It's the first year that I'm planning on participating in NaNo, and I am so excited! I've got my story set up, and the first third of it planned out, ...

I don't think the problem with the beginning is in the prose itself. Both versions are very well written. However, it's a bit lofty to start off with philosophical musings ...

Very good follow up! Your prose is still wonderful - though it could still use a little polish in places - and the pacing as you've edited it is much ...

Thanks aszecsei! (er... how do you pronunciate that?) I've gotten several comments on the lack of description in the first chapter. In the first draft, there was a big chunk ...

Hate to do this, but would you mind reading my first chapter, ? I really do need all the opinions I can get of it (which at this point, isn't ...

OMG YES. I just started reading Inkheart and OMG YEEEEESSSSSS. Can you tell I like it? Course I'm partial to books about book lovers. Thirteenth Tale also became one of ...

Trying to get my first five (in this case, seven or so) spic and span polished. Thank you in advance for all constructive crits and comments! Chapter One A Most ...

I guess my main question is do you really need this prologue? Why? Sure, it's easier on you, but it's a heck of a lot harder on the reader. Being ...

Okay, I've got several projects going on right now, but I want to get my main one finished. It's soooo close, and I just need to get some opinions from ...

It's a good beginning, though it could use a little more mystery/suspense. You can't rely on a prologue to give readers information vital to the story: many people don't even ...

courier, 12 - that usually gets it in the ball park of 250 words per page. And Agents don't mind it: that or times I think is standard. Though verdana ...

There are tons of characterization exercises out there on the web. Aside from character profiles detailing everything from what your character wears to what they eat for breakfast, some useful ...