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That feeling doesn't ever really go away completely. God knows, I've been posting in online forums/critique sites for several years now, and I still always get that "oh, crap" moment ...

Some people go right bang into the hook, but sometimes, depending on the agent, it's better to introduce yourself first - like when you've met an agent at a conference, ...

Skill. You can have all the soul in the world, but if you don't have the skill to craft it into a good story, no one's going to even give ...

Heyo Loredaen! You've got a good grasp of mechanics, and it's obvious that you can write (even for a draft, this is pretty good!). However, my main complaint with this ...

If you don't have a particular beginning in mind, then the first tip to starting off your story is: Don't start at the beginning. Start writing your favorite scene, or ...

Well, I got around to the final chapters (finally). Sorry, but school's been a real... well, we'll not be crude. Anyways, like I said before, good concept, needs a bit ...

If you're talking about flow in your prose, then one thing that has often been suggested to me, and which really helps is reading your stuff out loud. No one ...

Hey! Sorry it took me so long to comment on this. I'd read it when you messaged me, and then I got distracted by school... and well... Anyways. I just ...

I don't know how developed your characters are, but I think the thing you're going to want to think about now is setting; no character grows up in a vacuum. ...

I'm with Kibble: Said and Asked are usually the only two I'll need. Answer/reply is second. And then maybe one or two whispered/hissed/screamed/muttered in rare occasions when said seems to ...

Sorry that this isn't a full review, but I'm not finding much to criticize in this piece. Your characters are strong and compelling, and the conflict is present in full ...

Well, the fey were NEVER good, and vampires DON'T sparkle. THOSE books, if anything, are corrupting the original myths. My recommendation would be the same as I would give a ...

Have you posted anything in the review forums yet? It's kinda hard to help without meeting your writing style in person. ~Annie

The first paragraph had me sort of wary, but you managed to banish that completely within the next two. This drew me in and held me in a stranglehold. The ...

I'm glad you're working on editing it; I'd look forward to reading a rewritten/copyedited version of this. And I really do think there are several points that are fairly unique, ...