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FIRST OFF: You MUST make a review of at least 2-3 works BEFORE posting your own. Otherwise your works will get unnoticed. I'm just doing this because I think you ...

You are fond of writing the dark side of humans are you? I like it. I also like writing dark poetry for it seems so real compared to the usual ...

@born: Thanks! I knew the tense in "Hannah's my classmate in college" sounded wrong LOL and yeah, I SHOULD do a bit more elaborating on WHY she called HIM instead ...

First off: WELCOME TO YWS! Why so desperate to become old? Trust me, once you hit 20, you'd wish you can turn back time. Trust me, we all went through ...

FIRST OFF: You MUST make a review of at least 2-3 works BEFORE posting your own. Otherwise your works will get unnoticed. I'm just doing this because I think you ...

WOW!!! I certainly was awed by this! Amazing rhythm you got there. Even thought the pacing was slow at start, you nailed it just right down to the last line. ...

Okay, so I pretty much copied this from my intro. I was so used to providing information in the introduction part of the forum that I practically neglected this board. ...

it's "Pacquiao" LOL I have a bunch of corrections to make but I figure someone else will do it for me. I'm in the mood but I can spare not ...

yeah thanks. but if i did what you have suggested, i'd be wrong in tenses and plurality. thanks. you have nice ideas though you pretty much changed the whole context ...

And used to give me many advices. "advice" is already enough. Many and advices is redundant. It also ruins the rhyme and rhythm. It would also rhyme well with "lies..." ...

WOW. Just WOW. I really enjoyed reading this. A little bit of spacing wouldn't hurt just to make it easier on the eyes, but aside from that, It's A-OK. I ...

I am sure ,I am not happy today. This is the only major thing I'd like to point out. Would've fit nicely had it been something like For sure, I ...

“How about your friends?” “They all have work today. I’m on a half-day today so I was thinking of watching a movie to end my day today. So how about ...

From my blogsite ================================== Prologue HERE Thanks to Aquamarine for helping me in my prologue. Here's the continuation of this chapter Please critique both versions if you can :

But it may lead to mountains and jungles and seas, "but it may also lead to mountains, jungles and seas" sounds better. using "and" too much in a sentence is ...