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hiiii.... i really enjoyed reading the was kinda funny....but on a whole,,,we know what you feel when you see her..... great work... I did find few things that were incorrect.....like....spelling ...

Thanks ..... i know i need to improve on a lot of things.....i jst started it would take a bit more time...... anyways,i understood what you're trying to say...... thanks ...

please do review my work and let me know my flaws....and help me improve.... We are poles apart We do not match Everything i say, you just not seem to ...

I like the whole idea behind the poem......its so true that sometimes you wish to be the best of everything... and you want to improve so much that you forget ...

hey.....this was just an amazing piece of work....... brilliant...... u make the reader feel what you're feeling ..... however there were a few things that i noticed.....but i see that ...

hiiiiii...... welcome to YWS..... 1).There's a rule over here that before you post any of your own work,you should write at least 2 reviews....but i can understand that you being ...

hiiiiiiii......... After reading the whole thing....i can be sure about 1 thing ...n that is .....you have a whole lot of emotions going on inside you.....and here you tried to ...

hiiiiiiiiiii...... On a whole...,i enjoyed reading the poem...... a good attempt and a nice poem 1)i feel you could improve the flow of lines like.... "I am the sun you ...

hey thanks a lot...... u just made me notice my silly mistakes..... i got what you said.....and would try to improve upon my problems.... hav a great time...

hiiii 1)it is nicely composed but next you write,be a bit careful that you succeed in making the reader understand what you're trying to share 2)i think it lacks a ...

please review ma work and help me improve .....n do suggest a name too. What's faith? I don't think it exists What's happiness? No one would let you own it ...

hi rach..... it was a good poem......touches one's heart once....... 1)i think its more of a narrative type of it should have been in the other category i feel 2)when ...

hi GAM, i am new here too..... it's a nice piece of work though....i feel it could have been better 1)giving your poem an all capitals name really turns off ...

hii there..... i am new here too i appreciate the narration of your feelings which makes the reader realise the depth of sadness you are going through. simple n expressive..... ...

hi randomgrrl, i feel there are quite a few points you need to work on...... incorrect spellings really put a bad expression on your reader n also lowers his interest ...