amylouise

I'm not overly good at grammar and spelling because im dyslexic but this needs some work. It also needs to flow better because at the moment it's just not working. ...

Over all an amazing poem, but My hands fiddle randomly it just doesnt fit. You're using soft discriptive words for the rest of it and then "fidde randomly" just sounds ...

Wow. You really make the reader understand how your feeling. The way it is written brings the story to life. The second stanza doesnt fit with the softness of the ...

We looked around. I felt sick at what I saw. Bodies covered the floor, blood spilling frt om every part of them. We were standing in the middle of it ...