amatuli

I'm not sure what to say critique wise for this except it was brilliant. I'd love to read more of your work, if it is indeed as good as this ...

My life has been difficult, but far from boring. I guess you could say I was a nomad, a gypsy of sorts, never really knowing where I'll end up next. ...

It's been two years or more. I'm still here beside you, though I'm not sure what for. The longer I am near, the angrier I get. I can see and ...

Wow, I think this is one of the best I read content-wise yet. I tried to see something I could give some kind of feedback for, but I see nothing. ...

I understand about the whole site screwing up the format and what not. I'm more concerned about going from the alley to the roof and having to squint because of ...

I think aside from going from first person (I) to 3rd person (he) it was very interesting, it told a story from someone's point of view. I felt like it ...

I think aside from a few spelling mistakes (spell check works wonders) just read your stories aloud or to a friend and listen for what doesn't sound right, and fix ...

I have to say I think some people on this site are far too anal, I mean I thought I was anal, damn. I love your style, the imagery is ...

Holy guacamole dude, that's far from ehhhh, that's some awesome stuff. :D I love death stuff.

I want to say hi to everyone, I'm new to the whole internet community writing thing. I also wanted to apologize to anyone I freaked on after reading what they ...

I must say for 14 that is a great story, you are writing more right? :D Great job and keep it up you'll be famous some day I'm sure.

Your writing is excellent, I have no negative comments. Keep up the great work. :D

Your story could be really good if you spiced it up a bit, right now it doesn't flow very well and I got bored after the first sentence. You want ...

I don't entirely agree with the other person, I think your writing flows very well, there are characters, subject matter, lots of imagery. I can see the battle in my ...

I believe for a 14 year old your write rather well. :D Just make sure your not using the same word frequently and you should be good, Keep up the ...