alwaysawriter

Thanks Heather. I wasn't really sure about how fast someone could push a truck anyway. I'll change it. As of dirt roads, there are plently of them in North Carolina; ...

I wrote all this during 5th period, when I was in gym. I was inches away from people playing basketball so I'm sorry if its a little sloppy. As of ...

I don't happen to like the popular books--especially old classics. For some reason, the old English language annoys me. I haven't read Twilight and I don't think I will because ...

So cute. I had a golden retriever up until November--he turned out to have Lymphoma and we had to put him down. He was the sweetest dog in the world. ...

Descriptions of Josh and your MC. And the "too" part too. Other than that, great story.

I loved it. It was even better than Chapter 1. I agree though, you don't really have to describe what they're wearing unless it plays some important part in the ...

I thought it was really good. There's nothing I can add that someone hasn't already said--I'm a little slow on writing reviews. Anyway, can't wait to read Chapter 2, which ...

What I meant was the whole part about the her refeering back to 8th grade--sorry for the confusion. I know I need better punctation but I was having some trouble ...

"Stay the h*** away from my boyfriend." Another angry girlfriend yelled at me. I walked away, out of the football field--where the best of the catfights took place--, down the ...

It was a great story! Other than the format, I didn't see anything wrong with it. Good for a first post, though I wouldn't know. Great job!

The commas were a little bit much. The story line isn't exactly original but I liked how you put it in a guy's point of view instead of a girl's. ...

I completly agree. Varun shouldn't be capitalized. Your grammer needs some work but I could manage to follow it. Don't tell us so much--readers always need something to figure out. ...

Other than the few grammer errors, it was really good. When I write, I have a tendency to correct my grammer as I go along-which is probably why I never ...

That was a great story. I can't write like that no matter how hard I try. :) The grammer is a little bad but that's not your fault; its hard ...

That was a great exert! I loved all of the figurative language; I want to read more!