alwaysawriter

I thought it was really good. There were a few comma errors but that's it. I haven't read the other chapters but I was able to pick everything up immediantly. ...

A lot of grammatical errors; you put either too many commas, commas in the wrong place or none at all. Honestly, did they think she graduated from UCLA by luck, ...

I understood none of that but it was good anyway. My poetry received responses, usually rejections, with notes dashed across the page, or atop a line: "searing but unfocused," "radiant ...

Sometimes, the paper-skinned vets pressed pennies into her small palm. Sometimes, folk just spit. Too many Sometimeses. One right after the other doesn't flow. But the fountain didn’t look like ...

I liked it. I haven't read any of the other chapters so I don't know much about Mae but it was good anyway. If you haven't already written another chapter, ...

Hi. I'm in 4th period. Hehe--she completly forgot to give us our exam. We'll probably take it Monday or Tuesday. Sorry--off topic. I saw no grammatical errors except for a ...

From now on, in order for a message to be counted as a review, it must be 250 characters long. Since the average word is 5 characters long, that'd mean ...

Thanks. I knew it was a little short; it looked a whole lot bigger when I was writing in a notebook. I worked on some of Part 3 today--after finishing ...

It was an okay story. Here's some things that caught my eye: I found this in a lot of your sentences. We just met your second cousin", JK informs. The ...

I haven't read any of the other chapters but this chapter is good. A good beginning place and good ending place. There are some things that confused me though: If ...

Good story. It was white and floaty and the prettiest thing I had ever owned. Stop with the ands. Try "It was white and floaty; the prettiest thing I had ...

You left off some letters on some of your words. Other than that, I can't think of anything else wrong with it. Was he the one that called her Moo-Moo? ...

I liked it. Expand more on the characters, like Scasha said. You don't tell us much about Alyssa or Johnny--other that Johnny is a great swimmer, Alyssa is skinny and ...

I liked the story. I was in a sitchuation like that before--on both sides of it. I've never been much of a people person--ask Angelcat2958--and would much rather be myself ...

I liked it. I can't really say any more than the other two have said. Are you going to write more? I think you should. I want to hear more ...