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Don't mind me just going to read everything you've written after this poem... This was beautiful. Wonderfully worded. "The raindrops from the clouds above are wearing their best white dresses, ...

Over all, the plot was enticing and suspenseful. The sentences were very short and made the piece sound choppy and scattered. There were a few capitalization errors as well as ...

This was beautifully written and expressed pure and raw emotion. Your readers get a glimpse of the pain you felt retelling this. Well done and keep writing!