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As lee walked home from school that day, she thought about the promise she made her teacher. What would docs do about her parents neglecting her, and her father’s physical ...

Hey this is a really powerful piece of writing. I really like the short wording and sharp sentences. Like all the other people who have commented, you have absolutely nothing ...

This poem is really effective! The use of repetition has the number "2" lingering in your mind. The only one part I have something to say about: "anticipating when I ...

It was six in the morning and people were making their way to work. Lee began to pack up her old and worn sleeping bag, ignoring the disapproving glares of ...

This is such an absolute amazing poem. It's so moving and textured. The funny thing is, poems are often really personal, and difficult to decode, but this poem is the ...

This is a really powerful poem! I love it :D Just two notes: - The constant use of "Your lying", it should be "You're" - "how do they fall into ...

Hey Audy, Thanks for the feedback I tried the words you suggested and it just doesn't fit well. I'm not sure if it's a personal thing, but yeah i'm not ...

Because if looks could kill, you would survive the lively journey Until I brought myself to look into those dangerous eyes That deceiving smile that led to the faulty cards ...

I think every single person can relate to this poem. It really reaches out to a wide range of people, and shows that everyone feels and everyone hurts, even if ...

This is such a beautiful and moving poem. I appreciate the subtlety of your writing style. It allows the audience to interpret it however they may feel about it. Keep ...

This poem is so powerful, so moving! I really love your ability to metaphorically relate two totally different things, and make it sound so flowing! Keep writing, You're good at ...

Such an incredible poem with such powerful imagery. the only thing I'd change is the use of "things". Since this poem is so sophisticated and deep, why use such an ...

It's so incredibly moving and although as readers it is impossible to totally understand where it is you're coming from, we are intrigued and would like to hear the deeper ...

It's amazing how you have the ability to jam so much emotion into three stanzas, yet it comes across rather cold and hazed. I love your style of writing! :D

I like how it's so simple, yet you manage to plant some powerful words into the poem without making it seem out of place. Kind of get me ? :D