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I'm pretty sure that's the most entertaining piece of "romantic"fiction I've read in a long time. My only suggestion is to put in some more 'he said' \'she said' because ...

Very cool. Content-wise, I can't say much, except to wonder who the speaker is appealing to in the last stanza.---> Oh supreme lover! Let me be better than I am. ...

Don't Look Away Fathoms of green and foam melt In the two rings that stare at me. I’ve seen eyes before, but these are oceans. Inescapable focus pulls on My ...

I like it alot. I like that you chose to use first person and address the reader. That makes it much more pointed and personal. I could describe them for ...

I agree with niteowl. Lose the "who are". I think you can leave it out all together. Your imagery is amazing---> His face shines radiance, with eyes that dream of ...

My english class final is to write a series of poetry about my high school memories. Since I've been in band all four years, I figured a poem about music ...

I'm not sure. I listened to the audio and read it outloud to myself, but I'm not sure what I think. Prehaps thats a good thing? Maybe. I agree with ...

Moments, Only for moments it’s just us. For a blink of an eye and the draw of a breath, we belong to each other. Just two people who can laugh ...

This is really good Loose. PenguinAttack stole all the lines I was going to point out to you. Although I think the "I'm smarter than them" is fine because I ...

Hmm... I can't decide if I like this one more than the other. I found some transitory relief watching a young couple exchanges smiles nearby--a fresh pair of lovebirds, still ...

Excellent! This is very high quality work. As Kylan said, your vocabulary and dialogue is great. I do think I told you before with "The Death of Dark Samus" that ...

Hmm, I'm not an administer or anything but I think this should be put in the Other Poetry forum. As to the poem, I like. It's very calm and introspective. ...

Trust me, you DON'T need to decide on your major at age 13. I'm a high school senior and nearly half of my friends have changed their "majors" since freshman ...

Yay! I'm currently rereading this book! Well, I read it end to end straight through once, and now I just flip it open and see where I land. It's fun ...

Awesome job gadi! This is some great poetry. Congrats!