alleycat13

Lewis was a Christian, a member of the Church of England to be exact. He and Tolkien were also very close friends and critics of one another. They and some ...

Hum...that's weird that you couldn't get into the last one, but I kinda know what you mean. I didn't like that way The Last Battle begins--with that stupid, greedy ape ...

Honestly, I've never seen the series/movies. But, as you all know, Watership Down has some very bleak, dark, and/or violent parts in it, and I've always wondered how you could ...

Cool. This, like Poisoness said, is really well written. I just caution you one on using not using too many phrases in some of your sentences. They climbed up onto ...

This is a carefree piece I wrote. It has no rhyme and is meant to help me practice writing in iambic tetrameter. (four feet of unstressed-stressed). I know it's not ...

It's very simple, but I think it's pretty good. In the beginning, you keep saying Carlos, and then you suddenly remember there's such a thing as pronouns. You should mix ...

I like this alot. The description is powerful; the story is sad. In a good way of course. he says every thing's fine should be "everything". It's one word. The ...

I read nearly all of that article, and I have to say that it was really good. Most of the battles I've written have been one-on-one. I don't know what ...

There isn't a how lot for me to go on here (this is a short chapter), but I definitely think it has potential. Critiques--In the first paragraph, every sentence is ...

The Chronicles of Narnia are some of the best books I've ever read. I can reread them over and over and each time I get some more out of them. ...

Anyone who can read English should read this book! It is one of (if not) my favorite books ever. Brief history--Richard Adams is (still alive and writing) a British author. ...

This is the edited version. I think it's much better--not nearly as abstract or confusing. The Door I am burning, swirling, shaking. In my mind pass forgotten faces. The cool ...

There are some very nice emotions in this poem. The content is very real. But, as this is "dramatic" poetry, you may want to use some imagery, some visuals. Also, ...

Pretty much everything I could say has already been said. This poem is there, but it seems lack substance. It's a nice little narrative, but, of what, I don't know. ...

Hi everyone! I'm alleycat13, and I am new (like almost everyone here) to YWS. I've been "writing" for a couple years, and have been creating fanfiction for almost two full ...