alleycat13

This is poem is not about me, to prevent any "oh poor you" stuff. It's not about anyone I know either; it's just a "what if". I wrote it without ...

It's simple, and not overly poetic, but it's true. can not be heard, It should be "cannot". It's one word. It happens again later too. The repetition of the first ...

Everyone has already hit on all the typos. I couldn't find any other ones. Two things that bothered me. But the figure closest to the ground made a movement with ...

It looks like you need some help and consolation. I shall PM you.

I'll be honest--when I think of poetry, this is not what I imagine. But, as we all have different stories to tell, I shall try and critique this poem. The ...

Only kinda-sorta? okay... :cry: I tried.

I've only done speeches that I've written Me too, I'm afraid. I can't really help you with a suggestion, but I can help with other stuff, maybe. I've done lots ...

Okay, is a quote from one of my other posts. Found here--> It also included a huge article by Firestarter on how to write big, army involving battle scenes. My ...

For me, my characters become real people/things. And, while they may evolve and develop themselves throughout the story, I find myself unable to force them to do things. I end ...

Singing For Stars These skybound eyes gaze after stars, Who swirl across the deep night sky. Oh glimmer diamonds from afar! And revel, sparkle as you fly! So fair, these ...

Ya know when you watch a movie and sometimes they have a quick little narration to tell you what the heck is going on? When I write, I feel like ...

Wow. This really got to me. Folded paper gently brushed against the palm of my hand Okay, so, when I reached this point, I was like--what? I, the reader, was ...

This is a nice piece. The only thing that threw me off was the use of past tense The past threw me off too. You should just keep it in ...

I can tell there's a lot of sincerity in this poem. I think that nearly very line is good, but there are a couple that I think could be better. ...

I see that you've fixed the other typos, but here's a grammar mistake. No other love to who I might be turning, Oops! "who" should be "whom" because it is ...