alleycat13

School starts for me tomorrow. This is what happened to me last night. A Taste of Coming Autumn I gazed up at the stars, enamored by their greatness. How could ...

First, format. Please space out your paragraphs so my eyes don't burn. Second, your sentence structure is fine, but every single one is "I did..." "It was...". Mix it up. ...

6.5/10 The face makes me depressed, but the shadowy line movement thing :roll: is a neat effect.

This is very nice. It's really short, but you've taken a great deal of emotion and comdensed it into these few paragraphs quite nicely. I think that's what I like ...

Okay, I tutored a girl last year in algebra so I'll try and help you out. You seem to have gotten alot of replies, but no one has posted something. ...

I agree with Kitty15. You have three stories going on here, and, although I liked all three and enjoyed your style, I don't think you make a point of any ...

I haven't read the book, but they made a movie called White Oleander. I can only assume (yes, I know what that does for you and me) that is based ...

I had to read this book for school in 4th or 5th grade. At the time, I didn't like it. Just the tone of it really put me off. But ...

When I was younger, I'd just spout stuff---things that sounded good, neat phrases, intriguing words--and write it down. These"poems" weren't very poetic; they were more like thoughts on paper. Now, ...

Well, for me at least, this poem is not long enough for me to "brutally critique", but I shall try. Awkward phrases... and relish into my chain of enchantments This ...

I really liked the first two stanzas. I liked the word choice Fervently, Passionately. and the visuals of the rugs and bowed heads. The parallelism of the two religions at ...

This is the third version. Listen to the Rain Now gone are days of drought and heat. Hear droplets on my roof, which started in the dark to beat; the ...

They through on the street Did you mean "They throw us on the street."? It's short and simple. I think that's one of the reasons I liked it. Some people ...

Yeah, the beginning is a little Bible -like, but it is Tolkien's Genesis. Once you read that though and get the to the Noldor revolt, then it really picks up.

I'm currently rereading LOTR. Yes, it is long winded at times, but Tolkien is a different writer than Rowling. In his time, literature was like that. But I'd have to ...