aliepalie

Hello, Aliepalie here. I really liked the story. Still there were some things that bothered me. The blow had cut to the bone; the blade had only stopped cutting through ...

CHAPTER 3: …I growled and stepped inside. ‘Great.’… A few mice ran away when I closed the door behind me. I shook my head when I looked around. This sure ...

At first I thought: Yay! Vampire! Then I thought: No! Mary Sue! I could talk to animals, shape shift into any animal I wanted for as long as I wanted ...

Wow. I could really feel the emotion, it was so touching. You stopped it right before the climax, and that makes it even better. I really liked it. At first ...

Nice, I like the prologue and the idea. I hope you don't scatter my high hopes when I read the story, because I'm really looking forwarth to it! Well done! ...

Haha, nice story. I like aliens. And I like the way you wrote the part where the main charakter wakes up. Also, I really liked the way you described the ...

I really liked this, and it is full of emotion! It was different because sometimes it didn't rhyme, but that didn't matter at all, because of the beautiful sentences. It ...

CHAPTER 2: ...and with that the deal was made... The lawyer came again, and led me - and Jason - friendly but rushed to the door. It slammed close behind ...

Nice. I really like her. The story was awesome too, I read it two times over, just to enjoy the story all over again. You made very good use of ...

This story is good. I love it! Personally I hate Mary-sues, but who doesn't. This story gave me a good impression of a mary-sue and her daily life. (A) I ...

Awesome! At first you just think he's human, but as the story continues you start to doubt him being really a normal human, only to be surprised at the end. ...

Wow, the poem is so full of emotion, I could almost feel the pain myself. I like it very much. I love these sentences the most: In my pocket I ...

PROLOGUE: I awoke to a ringing sound of my phone. Half asleep I reached for it, my eyes still closed. I missed, and I felt the light tumbling over. I ...