alicat159

Hey, this is a story I started a while back and I wanted to know if I should drop it or continue. Please review. Just an all around review of ...

I think the adult idea would work very well for this story. It could make it easier to explain the story. :P Here's my line-by-line critique. I'm pretty bored so ...

Thanks, I'll edit it ASAP. I wrote this one day when I was beyond bored, so it's definatily not great. Also, I loved the line by line critique. (I agree ...

Omg! Okay. This story is very...interesting. Okay, who am I kidding? It was very disturbing. I don't see how a barely 14 year old girl would want to have sex. ...

(This story begins after Ariel saves Prince Eric from the ship wreck. She is in her room in the palace in Atlantica. P.S. there's a lot of dialogue and it's ...

Okay! Well, I can't wait for part II! PM me when it's done! :wink: Alicat159

Wonderful Piece! I'm so glad to be the first to review! Sunpaw’s eyes flashed in anger, catching every detail. The shadows of the bush across her face, the bush she ...

Wow! Another great piece. I guess I have nothing else to say considering Kyte said almost all of it. Sorry I didn't review it right when I read it. I ...

Haha. Okay. I guess the punishment makes sense then. Anyways, I can't wait to read chapter 4! PM me when it's ready. I'm shaking with anticipation! Haha. :D Alicat159

Wonderful! I read it all! You need to write more. But, here are a couple of flaws I noticed... He jerked his thumb at Ark when he said “somebody,” just ...

Kizzi already pointed out everything I would've. But I have one Question. What inspired you to set the story in South Dakota? I'm from the beautiful state and a lot ...

Hey, Thanks for the reviews and I'll work on it some more. I just wanted to show it to people, I guess. ( Eimear - I didn't expect to wow ...

Again, I loved this piece! They glanced at each other and then recited together, “ Beware, when life is tainted, weakness will wane to strength and the embers of blood ...

I've deleted this poem. :D Alicat159

I can't believe how much this sounds like Erin Hunter's writing! But, even Erin makes mistakes. These are just a couple of tips: Several cats nodded agreement, although some whispered ...