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Re: Prologue - Please Don't Rest Tonight
I loved the opening paragraph with the introduction of the nightmare monster-creatures. The way you described the scene I thought was very well done. One thing that confused me in ...
Jul 6, 2008 -
Re: Flying/ Random scene
This was just a scene I had zooming around in my head, sort of inspired by a painting. I might try and continue on it, but I'm not sure yet. ...
Apr 27, 2008 -
Re: Hey Its High School Pt2!
I thought this was okay, I liked how you introduced the characters, letting the reader get a feel for their personalities. One thing that I suggest you work on is ...
Apr 26, 2008 -
Re: “Er,” I said, “not really.”
Overall, I liked the writing, though the style sort of confused me at times. Were you trying to portray both characters, or just one? If you are doing just one, ...
Apr 22, 2008 -
Re: Emmaline [revised]
Beautiful writing! I love the imagery of the scene described.
Apr 20, 2008