afeefah

I'v read al of your story so far and it is amazing i cant think of a single fault in it and the only reason im posting is to say ...

Well everyone else seems to have covered the nitpicks so i think i'll just comment on the plot instead. i like the way that whilst setting the scene it doesn't ...

this is really good as i ve said before and i can tell that you really know your character inside out. once again you've portrayed the emotions of your character ...

Mine's...Afeefah!!!

Hi! Welcome to YWS! So, i saw your post and though,'ok, this looks interesting..' so i read it!the plot is very good and it makes me wonder about Ethan, whether ...

Hi! I really enjoyed this but ther isn't much feeling in the characters apart from sadness. it's very well written but i think you just need to work more on ...

Glad to know i'm not the only crazy one! this thread seems to be a confession thread for anyone who talks to their characters! :D yeah i chat to mine ...

Hello! this is really good. ican't find anything wrong with it and i really liked the way you spoke through the man even though it wasn't first person. Did that ...

hi again! wow. what else can i say. this is amazing. carry on writing and PM me when you have more please! Afeefah :)

i really enjoyed this! you portrayed your characters emotions really well and caught my attention straight off with your description. just one thing though and this is just a suggestion. ...

Hi. the title caught my eye so i thought i'd give this a read. this is slightly confusing as i have no background info and i don't know what 'Onia ...

Hi. everyoe else seems to have covered everything so there's not much to say. i really enjoyed your story and will read the next part when you post it. * ...

Hi. Could you please review this for me? Thanks! :D

Hi. So, I did this for the Forest Setting Contest but liked the idea and may use this as a Prologue for a story. Any reviews would be welcome! The ...

Hi. I'm going to concentrate more on the plot as I'm not really that great at grammar. it's very fast moving but i think that maybe instead of having the ...