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Hi Lilicia! So your story is really good. You definitely have talent. I just have one nitpick : Wherever you put 'Dad' or 'Daddy' you haven't' capitalised it so make ...

Hi Sapphirejay! So there's not really much to point out as Bondgirl pointed out all of the nitpicks. I like your plot; it has potential but I think that you ...

Hi! I see I'm your first customer! *Jumps around with excitment* Anyway... Here it is! It's fantasy fiction and please feel free to rip it to shreds! Thanks a lot! ...

Hi! Name: Which path to take? Genre: Fantasy Fiction Link: Thanks a lot! Afeefah :D

Hi Tiger! Could you please review this. It's fantasy fiction. Rip it to shreds! Thanks! Afeefah :D

Hi Chocoholic! Here it is. Please rip it to shreds! Thanks! Afeefah :D

Thanks a lot Stella! Your review really helped. *Goes away and makes corrections* Afeefah :D

I picked novel. I am writing at the moment but I have no idea where it's going. My characters are controlling me! *Screams and runs away* *Comes back and starts ...

Like the others, i really like this idea, it's original. Even though it is short, I enjoyed it so please PM me when you post more of it. Well done ...

Hi! This is a really twisted fairytale and it has a lot of room for improvement so you have permission to rip it to shreds! Nicely. :D “I told you ...

:shock: Cookies... :lol: Hi again Phantom! Chapter 4 of my story is up. Could you please review it! Thanks P.S. Use the same link as before. Afeefah :D

Chapter 4 It’s almost twenty to three when I leave Seqain and Venro. The sun has been swamped by dark clouds and it begins to rain heavily. I walk a ...

I think i started reading when i was three. "The Cat in the Hat" was and is one of my all time favourites. :D Afeefah :D

Hi RJ! The above poster handled the grammar problems etc so I'll focus on the plot itself. i really think that your story has potential and you build up the ...

Hi Faia! I'm here to review your work. The story itself and the plot is very good. you express your characters emotions really well which iss one thing i sometimes ...