aeroman

Well said. I completely agree.

Just to be clear, I did not mean to insult Kim. I was trying to be as honest as possible and give Kim a clear picture of what was going ...

It's like ripping off a band-aid. You've just got to do it as quickly as possible. And then you and your parents need to figure out why you're not doing ...

I found this narrative very simple yet complex, a paradox. The realist completes the dreamer and the dreamer, the realist. Although neither has anything in common with the other except ...

Wow, I've been gone far too long! Congratulations on your success, Brad.

When I first read the description of the man with the goofy glasses, the red pen, and the smile, beckoning 'you' closer I believed he had a sadistic evil about ...

6.5/10 - That's a tough one to rate because nazis/facism and time travel have all been done before. I personally don't like it that much, but it could be very ...

Actually I like description of sceenary, I mean its the detail that really capture the reader into relating with the character. The line The night air was crisp as was ...

Scenery is obviously a detail and not an event. But I don't think you understood me when I said event, or maybe I just need to clarify. When I say ...

Actually, I have to disagree with aeroman, for the first paragraph anyway. I think that, too often writers don't put any scenery in at all, just because they want action ...

Nobody expects you to be perfect. That's why we critique your work :)

This first paragraph doesn't feel right. Something is wrong with that second sentence. It's the tense. It should be 'Fall had finally...' if you keep it in present tense then ...

I have a ritual that I do everytime I'm deciding whether or not to read a story. I look at it. Look it up and down and decide whether it ...

This narrative has the potential to be very good. As I read, I thought to myself how wonderful the flow of the story is. The narrator is not necessarily a ...

No problem! I'm glad I can help out. I didn't know it was a story you were using to vent through. I actually believe it is more intriguing than Gypsie ...