adriangarcia

I think, maybe, I don't like it. I can't make up my mind. It is emotionally driven' and, therefore, as a reader, I can't fully understand what's going on. Make ...

I coughed once for God BY Adrian I coughed once for God hoping that He could see my pain. But a blind man told me, He is Blind. I coughed ...

Your poem satisfied me. But, I suggest editing more. It seemed too short and broken for the a subject that is so deep. It needs to be thick. But, I ...

I was a little confused. I thought it had to do with homosexual incest. Then, I read it again. And, it made much more sense. So, I suggest editing it. ...

Hmmmm ... I don't know how I feel about this. Which is either a good or bad thing. Before I read it, I thought I'd hate it. While reading it, ...

First, let me tell you, try to stay away from subjects such as death, suicide, and overwhelming emotion. Why? Because, as a writer, you become too muddled with your own ...

It was a good start. Based on what you wrote, it has true potential. Lines flowed well and had meaning. However, I have no idea what you're talking about. Elaborate ...

I kind of like this poem. However, I also kind of didn't. At first, I didn't like it. It was too generic. And, I couldn't read it without getting bored. ...

Loneliness is like sex. It should never be spoken of but everyone talks of it. It creeps from the most middle of your body into the extremities. It leaves you ...

Mr. Thomas wanted to be a writer. He wanted to be a writer terribly. But, he couldn’t write. He’d turn papers after papers into his teacher who’d return them with ...

At first glance, hated it. Second glance, loved it. A problem you will face and I have no doubt someone will mention this after me is grammer. Specifically, punctuation. I ...

It was a good poem. The only problem I have with this is that I find myself not wanting to read it again. Not even a second glance. Whether it ...

Overall, it was a sweet poem. Nothing grand or lyrical. The biggest problem is that it is forgettable. Even writing this, I can barely recall a word of it. Not ...

It was a great poem. I was expecting it. Which in some cases is bad but I don't think it was for your case. It worked out nicely. Good imagery. ...

I thought that it was perhaps about Jesus Christ. Jesus being the speaker. However, I really have no basis since He had only twelve apostles and you uses 'twenty-four' unnamed, ...