adriangarcia

Seriously, this is one of the cutest poems I've read! Very, very sweet! :) And, good too! -Adrian

This Poem is Me BY Adrian Built from Titan’s ashes and imbued with His breath, this is me. Carried over time and forced to leave, this is me. Sent to ...

Hmmm ... I am not a fan of the structure. It makes it hard to read and, surprisingly, boring! Though, you use words well. I enjoyed them. But try a ...

I have to say that I preferred the last last stanza over all of them! In fact, I would have built a poem around the this beach ... Rather, then ...

I loved "the Lottery." Jackson wrote an amazing short story! I highly suggesting reading this. BTW, if I remember correctly she wrote this for the New York Times. It caused ...

Your stanzas are very, very choppy. It made it hard to get into at first. But, it was a good poem. I liked it. Short, simple, and sweet! However, the ...

I Held Time in my Hands BY Adrian I held time in my hands and would not let it go. My cold hands imprisoned the golden force. I felt his ...

I usually don't like poems of this nature. But, it was quite good. You got what you wanted to say across and that's an accomplishment in itself. There were some ...

It doesn't. :) -Adrian

Now, I have to defend myself. RAWR: You keep saying you write out of what you feel and think which is what "emo" is. You're, my friend, mistaking "emo" with ...

I had no idea it was about a "drug trip." -Adrian

That's fine that it's your first poem. If you read my first poem "I Coughed Once for God" you will see faults in it. That's why you post these on ...

Sleep comes when I shut my eyes. I go to a place where I might fly-- where I almost never cry. A place I could meet that one guy-- Somewhere ...

It was an OK poem. I'd suggest making poems with more tangible influences. What I mean by that is try making narratives. Because, you're spitting out boring ... just OK ...

Not much to say since it's a shallow, short poem. But, it was a sweet poem. GRAMMAR! Don't forget it! -Adrian