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Is this kinda based off the Drizzt series? Because I recognized "the Underdark". :D Anyway, I'm not the best at giving crits, but I shall point out the ones which ...

Thanks so much for the crit!! :D Hello, there. I find it odd that you haven't read much fantasy in which there are detailed sword fights, that's quite strange. I ...

Hey! First of all, thanks for the crit! No it wasn't too harsh, and even if it was, I'm not the type to reject crits. :lol: ^ This part here ...

1,667 words including BBCodes, so I guess it's not too overwhelming. Right! I wasn't sure if this should belong to the Fantasy section or the Action/Adventure section. It's Medieval Fantasy, ...

I agree with the comments about the whole rushed thing. I honestly think her reaction to everything isn't believable at all. Getting transformed suddenly in a single day is going ...

Dayum! I haven't posted in years!!! Anyway I recently started interested in getting into writing, and then I suddenly remembered this forum. :lol: So anyway, hello all, again. :D I ...

What Jay said. It was simple, straightforward, and somehow made me hooked till the end. I'm fine with the name Clover, it sounds pretty cute. Grammar and vocabulary is more ...

Syte: Thanks for the constructive criticism :D I edited out the mistakes you pointed out. I put "short" in the title because it was short,not because it was a short ...

Well actually the only thing causing the mild cheesy feeling was the way you wrote your dialogue and the actions of the character in general. Darius was sort of the ...

Lol, it was good. I was hooked, and the writing was fantastic, save a couple of typos. The only thing would be the later parts... It sounded -pardon me- a ...

It was certainly one of the worst days of his life. One of the worst. It was a forest. A damned forest. Right in the middle of the cruel hand ...

Hi, nice one for your first poem xD COME UP WITH MOAR. MOOAARRR. /insanity

Longer now, but a few points you can improve on... Tendra stood at the bedside, fully dressed. Her hair was wet from her bath and she glowed. --- If she ...

Head. Hurt. Pain. Agony. -Pats Buchanan-

Quite humourous, but then it's still far too short!! x_x Nothing much has happened here... In fact, you can combine Ch 2 and Ch1 together and still call it half ...