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Thanks, this is super helpful. You have a great attention to detail so I cannot thank you enough for this. The mechanical descriptions are mostly owed to Henriks personality type, ...

That was intense . . . I love the ending there, with the birds. I love it when a character is in extreme danger and their minds goes to random ...

Wow we are so on the same page with this. I was literally going to ask you for a prequel but totally forgot. I think that's why I enjoyed this ...

Aha that makes sense! Yeah I just took that the wrong way and thought she literally had never heard of anything magic-related. No worries! With Paris, I feel like his ...

Paris pointed at a stain on the wooden floor that he insisted resembled a flamingo, Ugh, this just makes me remember when I loved Paris and you betrayed me :( ...

What can I say, you have a powerful energy

Thanks Eagle! Please don%u2019t seek and kill me! I agree about adding more emotion, I think thats started to make things better, I wasnt sure about it at first! Thanks ...

Thank you!! ^_^ Really appreciate the feedback! (Yall fast tonight) No worries about that sentence, maybe it will make my future editor mad one day haha

Liberty and sadness just dont go together

Wow thanks for such a flashy review! Glad you liked it! I can never tell, but its usually a good sign when I enjoyed writing it. I fixed that error, ...

I really loved reading that! It's so awesome how much you've thought about this. I was expecting a great answer but this is just next level. It's like you've given ...

Ahhhh so that's why Paris's theory is so hard to prove but will be so ground breaking if he does. Thank you!

*waits patiently*

Thanks Horisun :) They are both part of chapter 11, I often post the chapters in halves. I'll try to do something about making it a bit snappier in draft ...

Thanks Horisun! I will be sure to add more emotion to this scene. it definitely makes more sense for Henrik to be more emotional before his mother dies right? My ...