Zibbie

basically i'd feel super lame if i read that whole thing and didn't comment. I loved it! :elephant:

Oohhh i like this chapter even better than the first. Not much action, but the dialogue was great. each a bump, darn it!” Anita said i would have rather she ...

Esther Sylvester, cool name! yeah Im new too and its spring break so I'm Canada pretty much just leaving this site on my laptop all day. Thanks for the review ...

Really like this story! im glad its featured (how does that happen by the way?) anyways a word just caught my attention... Cassie giggled quietly at his sombre reaction. sombre ...

Hi BeautifulDoom, I also love these kind of stories, It's like falling for the bad boy. First off... those dark eyes that forever hold the gleam of meannes Im not ...

Sounds cool! i take all Ap classes too, and i play the piano and sing. maybe all writers are the same?

Hi Esther! I really like the plot for this story, and in the end i was still curious and wanting to read more. Here are some things i noticed... He ...

First paragraph was included in the last post, but its kinda confusing if i don't add it here. Hope you like it! Please comment! Seraphina woke with a gasp, her ...

I really liked this one! i just saw the title of the chapter two you posted, so i went to go read chapter one because it looked like a catchy ...

hi Tomothy_mayhem :) Im zib Okay so i love the story as a whole, and it has a really strong plot. But there were some parts i read and i ...

Im not really good with structure, but i tried to fix it. Better?

Prologue The wind pounded the ocean, delivering fists of air that made the sea rise with a white foamy spray that rose over the boardwalk. The man, utterly unperturbed by ...

Hi, yeah Jake's bottom half looks a little distorted, but i love the girl (blanking on her name right now). These are really good. Oh and i think you might ...

Hey! i really liked the story. there were some parts that needed better punctuation like Stella mentioned, but overall it seemed quite interesting. though this line caught my attention "I ...

Chapter 2 She sat, looking down at her hand. It was rimmed with blood, cut by the damn necklace she had to – for some reason unbeknownst to her – ...