ZannaShepherd

Hi, :D I have a story that I really want feedback on. It's the first part of a three part short story. Also a possible entry for the 'Once Upon ...

Hi, I have a story that I really would like feedback on. It's the first part of a three part short story. Also a possible entry for the 'Once Upon ...

Hi, I have a story that I really want feedback on. It's the first part of a three part short story. Also a possible entry for the 'Once Upon a ...

Hi, I have a story I would really like to get some feedback on. It's an entry for the Once Upon A Time contest, and so it's supposed to be ...

Hi amatuli, :smt039 I got your message. :D This is a really short piece so there's not much I can critique you on. Here are a few things I found: ...

Sorry about that, (I had computer problems) :evil: OK, continuing where I left off: (and remember I'm just a beginner, and I have really no right to critique others writing. ...

Yay! I'm glad you wrote more. I really like where your going with this story. Here are a few things I found: But before I could feel safe with them ...

Hi Fantasy♥101, Sorry, I'm new at this, and totally suck at giving reviews. I really liked your story! It had a great plot and kept me glued to the page. ...

Hi, The plot of your story was ok, but it reminded me a lot of Eragon. The characters were a little plain and I felt nothing towards them. The ending ...

Once Upon a Time Part~1 Once upon a time in a faraway land, where magic was as real as the air we breathe, and Kings and Queens still ruled from ...

Once Upon a Time Part~1 Once upon a time in a faraway land, where magic was as real as the air we breathe, and Kings and Queens still ruled from ...

Hi Miss Ching, Your story was ok, but it was lacking any real plot. Your characters were kind of shallow, I felt nothing towards them. Other than that here are ...

Hi Elia92, Your story definitely has the feel of a fairy tale to it. Your plot was solid enough, but I think you should slow it down a bit. (It ...

Hi Elia92, :smt039 I really liked this piece of writing. (It's just a start to a story, correct?) The plot was compelling, and makes the reader (me) want to read ...

Hi Dakota, :smt039 I really liked your story! It was a little hard too follow sometimes, and it ended abruptly, but it was still awesome. :smt026 Also it felt like ...