ZannaShepherd

OK I'm back. I finished reading it (finally, I hate not having internet!) and the ending was great! I only found a couple more things, that seemed noteable to mention. ...

Ok I'll make this quick cause I have to leave, but I thought your story was very well written, and the plot had a nice twist to it. I only ...

I really liked this piece, It has great potential of becoming an awesome story! Everything I saw that I had questions about, or needed changing someone already pointed out, so ...

OK, first off, I have have to say you did a great job with the description, everything was so vivid and colorful and I wish I had half of your ...

Wow, that was a great start, very powerful especially the ending where it mentions the first to die, here's one other error I found, other then the ones already pointed ...

Ok, I think you did a good job here, but I really have no idea where this is happening or what the main character is supposed to look like or ...

Sounds like it could be interesting! Good Luck, and have fun!

Hi. OK this could be a start to something great, but it needs some work. I'm not exactly sure what's happening here with the water. How are they dancing on ...

This beginning has great potential! I like how you had the character see herself, and the vagueness of it, makes me definitely want to read more. sarebear already did the ...

I'm like totally back!! It's summer, and time to write!

Thanks for Reviewing my work! I fixed what you mentioned, I didn't change the introduction, because it's supposed to be narrated. Thank you for your input! ~Zanna

Hi, For my homework I'm supposed to pick a movie and show a five minute clip from it of 'good (realistic) acting'. If anyone has any good suggestions I'd appreciate ...

Hi, I really like the beginning of your story. It's compelling and makes me want to keep reading. Here are some things I found that you could fix. I notice ...

Once Upon a Time Part~2 Eighteen short years later, we find Nadia and her two best friends Layia, a Taylor, and Healer’s daughter, and Tenia, daughter of the Inn keeper’s, ...

Yay! I'm glad you wrote more! (Thanks for letting me know!) Here's some things I found. . . . I still had those ropes and the stake. Wasn't there only ...