ZannaShepherd

I originally started this piece for the 'If it were a Story' contest, but It got so long I entered a different one, and I'm still working on this one. ...

This is a revised version of my earlier piece, (same title). I took the old one to my teacher, and with her help hopefully improved it. No air. My lungs ...

Hi, I have a couple pieces with only 1 or 2 comments on them that I'd love another opinion on, and I'd really appreciate it if you'd review them. Thanks!

Tears of a Fairy I ran, I ran from it all. The shame the sorrow, and the never ending torment. The only thing that seemed to be on my side ...

Hi JabberHut! I really enjoyed reading your work. It moved smoothly (all except the places I'll point out later) and I liked how you contrasted things, it made for a ...

Hi, I would really appreciate a review. I have two pieces, but if you only have time for one, I'd prefer the contest entry to be critiqued. Thank you so ...

This is my entry for 'If it Were a Story' contest , I know it's lame, but practice makes perfect (then how come no ones perfect :? ) and I'll ...

Thanks for the advice, I'll go over my piece and try to fix it a little more. Sorry about the comma's that's a big problem for me (obviously). Also how ...

Ok, I really enjoyed your story, especially the end, where we find out it's a table lamp explaining everything. You have great description, and unique writing style. I found a ...

Wow, your story is very (very) full of emotion. You have a great writing style, that's very unique. I didn't find any gramatical errors, so thumbs up to that. I ...

This is a story I wrote for my creative writing class. I'm a little out of practice, so any constructive criticism is gladly welcomed. :mrgreen: Life Without Essence Rebecca sat ...

Interesting concept, I really like your writing style. I didn't find any gramatical errors, so thumbs up to that! Good luck, have fun. and keep up the great work! ~Zanna ...

Hi Dakota, Sorry I haven't had time to review your work yet, it's very long and will take me weeks (maybe months) to review all of it. (I've already read ...

Ok, interesting story here. The characters were likable, and you gave enough info n them, but this piece lacked in description of any and everything. We have the facts but ...

Ok, I liked your piece of writing, very descriptive and captivating. Nice job. It was a little dark, but that's just a personal opinion and not something you should worry ...