ZakkuAlpha

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Hey, I'm very happy that you wrote more :). I'll get right to the review. "glanced at her knew home." I think you meant to say "new home" "Her stepmother, ...

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Hey Mars, This is quite an interesting story. I just have a few things that might help you revise this. At the beginning I was quite lost, because I thought ...

This is a very interesting story. A few things you could fix up: At that thought, Julia felt the smile slip from her face. They were gone. Both of them. ...

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Yes I am glad that I can join the fantasy writers on the forum. No More Questions Favorite Music? I like alternative music, My favorite band is All American Rejects ...

Bravo Bravo, This is a really good start to a story. The way you describe the movement and emotions of the characters was really good, I had no problem visualizing ...

Wow, this little skit (I'll call it) really does a good job at depicting the gameplay of The Sims games. I myself am a big fan of it and can ...

Wow, this is quite a welcome to YWS. Probably the most friendly welcome I have received on every forum. :). Thanks for all the tips and help about how things ...

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Hey users of YWS. I'm Zakku Alpha, and I am excited to be apart of all the writers on the forum. I am in every use of the word a ...

This is very nice poem. I love all of the metaphors you use, they successfully help me understand what the girl is feeling. Very nice job.

I really like this story. Its very cleverly written. I think that when you reveal that she can fly, it should be after she does it, near the end. Then ...

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