ZakkuAlpha

This a very good start to a story. I enjoyed reading it and it was very interesting. I didn't find many mistakes because of how short it was. I'm pretty ...

Don't worry, the characters are developed later in the story (When they're in purgatory). Yeah, I know its a bit cliche but the story gets more creative as it progresses ...

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Well, I have this idea for a story that involves 3 main characters each fighting off the shadow of death, which is in the form of a raven. The entire ...

Wow, this was very good and mysterious.I think all the other reviewers covered all the critique. Very nice job. Keep up the good work. :D

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Thanks for the link on the article. The battle is about the MC who gets kidnapped by three men and is taken to a desert. The Main character breaks out ...

Hey guys, I'm trying to write an action scene and a scene about a man getting lost in the desert. They both need to fill up an entire chapter. Can ...

Hey ya, I'm Zakku :) here to give you a review. I really liked your use of repeating "But I am calm." I kind of got lost in the story, ...

Hey there, I'm Zakku Alpha. :) Welcome to YWS. Why don't you tell us more about yourself. Favorite Book? Favorite Author? Favorite Poet? Favorite Color? How long have you been ...

Ooh, the story gets more suspenseful. I loved how you continued the story, boy it's creepy and I enjoyed reading it. I like how you made the character tell herself ...

Very nice poem. I liked it :). I have a few things that you could improve upon. Like Audy said, stay consistent with your capitalization and fix those spelling mistakes. ...

Very nice :). This is really emotional which is good. When a writer puts alot of emotion into their work it makes it seem more real and less fake. Either ...

Oh-oh! Nice, I loved how you built up the tension and displayed mystery. Overall this is very good, and I like it. Keep up the good work, :).