Yuriiko

Hello there, Skinnykins! Here as requested. First of all, I thank you for the request. However, I don't think I'd be much of that help as seeing those previous critiques ...

Hello there! Here to review your piece. :smt001 Breathing heavily , Selene Day peered around at the corner of the dark forest. Nothing. The forest was thick, evergreens were everywhere. ...

Hello there! Here to review. First of all, I thank you for the good read. The imageries and as well with the metaphors in the poem flowed very well although ...

Hi there! *waves* Here to review. :3 The first thing I've noticed is your title. It's just tad confusing since the story's all based on third person point of view. ...

Hello there! Here to review. So, I apologize in advance if ever there's going to be a repetition around here or if you might see this review vague. It's because ...

Hello there! Here to review. It feels like melting ice when he looks at me, Perhaps if you could end this stanza with a period not a comma. :3 At ...

Hello there! Here to review. Do you remember When my father He called me I would scrape off the word "he", since it's pretty understandable that you're still referring to ...

Hello there, Jemjive! Here to review. The first thing I've noticed in your poem is that you've kept on capitalizing the first letter of each line, which I think is ...

Hello there! Here to review. :3 So I guess this is fifty percent poem and a half prayer. Anyways, I feel like the poem's all blurry and couldn't relate much ...

Hello there! Here to review. my arms stretched out in front of my so I would have some forewarning before I smashed into anything. It feels lacking. pulsing down my ...

Hello there! Here to review. I'll be pretty honest. Your story has completely threw me off just by reading you introductory line. You tend to jump tenses a bit. Remember, ...

Hello there! Here to review. Except for the wind, the only sounds that we could hear were the sounds of our footsteps on the rough pavement. I would have to ...

Hello there, Angel! Here to review. But since then our friendship grew . I don't think you need a period after the whole line, it's not even forming a sentence, ...

Hello there! Here to review. The flow of the poem is good and so with the concept behind it. However, sometimes the flow is distracted by your commas, although very ...

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