Yrael

Welcome! But please, spare us from that pathetic internet slang. It's pretty annoying.

Alright, I think I shall only critique the Prologue, at least for now: The faint sound of footsteps echoed through the trees. Okay... this is an odd sentence.. You really ...

Isn't the River Styx something from Mythology? Like where you go after you die?

1.Slipknot 2.Linkin Park Chemical Romance

Back on the thought of description: This description was quite improved. You did allow a visual of everything that took place, but I still think you could kick it up ...

If you're going to do that you're better off not having a prologue. You're story would be many times better if you left the reader not knowing the origin of ...

"Say hello to my little friend." - Scarface

Yeah, I agree. Hey, I may be the same age as him... But at least I have the sense and maturity to know what and what not to do.

I watched it once in my debate class, and it was disgusting, although quite funny. "McGas" and "McNausious" (sp?) were my favorite parts of that movie. But I do still ...

I could never make myself watch Super Size Me. I would never be able to eat Fast Food again... and honestly... I like to eat out... so... :roll: I could ...

Hello everyone, you may have seen me a few times. I have been here about a week but never introduced myself properly. So, I you could say this is to ...

What you need is some input from another 13-year-old. (Me) I must agree with Rei, Bobo, Qi, and the others. Thirteen is too young of an age for one to ...

Chugging

Football

You know his brother?