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Re: A Letter To God...
Doxie!! I love, love, love it! Especially because I know that you actually feel like this. It was beautifully done. But I want you to know that there will be ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: How could you?
What did I ever do That made you turn against me? All I said was true And you took everything for free. Everything I ever did Was give you advice ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: My Aborted Child
This was very emotional. I loved it and I myself am against abortion so I liked the way you focused on it. Needless to say, when my father found out ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Speaking Of It...
This is a beautiful piece. The simplicity added to its brilliance and it's very easy to understand. I've got a few mistakes I'd like to point out though. As i ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Dream
This is a good piece. I've got some things to point out though. The water all around me was slashing into my face making it hard for me to see ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Burden To mourn
I love, love, love it. I like the way you wrote it, the direct and straight-to-the-point beginning and then the sudden twist of the plot at the end. The suspense ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Why?
This feels so real that I'm left wondering if this is fiction or an actual life story. It's really good, I just have some things to point out. Did you ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Heartbreak
Thinking of you On this beautiful night Lonely and blue On this perfect sight I feel this pain Deep inside my heart Like a heavy rain Falling tears start As ...
Apr 4, 2011 -
Re: Its Of Stone Heart
This is a really lovely poem. It expresses so many things all at once and it also says things that only happen to certain people but are never pretty pictures. ...
Apr 3, 2011 -
Re: Ballroom
This is a very beautiful poem. I really didn't find anything wrong with it but yeah, I understand what you mean. Good job!
Apr 3, 2011 -
Re: 'Til Death Do Us Part
Chapter 3 “She hates me.” Troy said, dropping his head onto his hands. I felt the pain from his words but I knew I couldn't do anything to change it. ...
Apr 3, 2011 -
Re: 'Til Death Do Us Part
Sure. I'll put it up! Thanks. :)
Apr 3, 2011 -
Re: Miserable
This is very beautiful albeit in a painful way. Believe me when I tell you that girl you're not alone. This was really good and somehow I can relate to ...
Apr 2, 2011 -
Re: Dear Mister
Well, this is an amusing poem. I guess, you've already improved on the mistakes you had before because I couldn't find anything wrong with it besides maybe the capitalization of ...
Apr 2, 2011 -
Re: I Was Never Meant to be
Hey Doxie!! So, let me start off by saying that this poem is really emotional and I love the way you wrote it but there are some mistakes that I ...
Apr 2, 2011