Yanni1995

Gray morning daylight peers inside the dim apartment with beaten walls and cold floorboards. An echoing hollow silence interrupts a family game of tag-your-it across the street. A tall man, ...

She looked at the car as it disappeared in a cloud of dust and knew that things would never be the same again. There she stood inside her house, no ...

Why did I end up with him for a older brother? use an for words that start with a vowel, a for words that start with a consonant. way to ...

You're write when you said you need help with your grammar. And I'm just the girl you need. I love the story but there are quite a few mistakes that ...

Chapter 5 The next morning he came at around ten. He rang the doorbell just as everyone was about to leave. I answered the door. “You’re early.” I told him ...

It's almost perfect except for these mistakes: for I'm a vegitarion. - it's vegetarian. Now I'll tidie up, and head off to school. - it's tidy. That's all... Hope it ...

I love it! It's full of emotions and I could almost feel the anger and betrayal radiate from your words. Some nit-picks though. Do you know how it feels To ...

I love it because I can totally relate to it. But, somehow I feel like the rhyme in the first stanza is a little forced and the flow in the ...

I believe you when you say that you wrote this because you were annoyed. It was shown clearly with your words. Nice grammar as well. You're right, it is amusing. ...

This is a really awesome poem. I love, love, love it!

Chapter 4 Troy was talking to Marc again and I knew he too, remembered the same thing I did; our first night together as husband and wife. I watched as ...

I love, love, love it... although, I really don't know how you can feel this way... *ahem* Anyway, I like it a lot because it is very meaningful and there ...

Jessica froze. Time stopped and she couldn’t think. What happened, you might ask. I’ll tell you what happened. Jeremy Anderson spoke to her. That’s what happened. Oh that’s right! I ...

I love it!! Especially because I fell for it myself!! Good job!!

I love it. There are times when I feel like the way the character did so I can relate to it. A job well done!